Talk:GRSJ224LGBTINISRAEL

Hello, I really liked your article since I've always been interested in the LGBT scene in Israel. I would like it even better if you could incorporate some historical background inspecting how and why Israel came to embrace the LGBT community. Moreover, you could maybe give us an example or two of the stance of surrounding cities(beside the extremes). Great work overall! I liked that you gave us links to the Tel Aviv Pride parade!

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I'm really intrigued in your article as I often travel to the neighbouring country of Lebanon and know that LGBT community there is large there but still taboo. I think it's great how there are equality laws in Israel but I think you should provide the LGBT laws that are discriminatory in neighbouring countries such as Lebanon, Syria, Jordan, and Egypt. For example, the act of sexual relations with the same sex is punishable by law in Lebanon. This would definitely strengthen your argument!

Hi, thanks for sharing! I think it would be beneficial for you to re-read or review your writing. I found some grammar and spelling mistakes. This can make the article both hard to read and some of your points harder to understand. For example, under the section "Tel Aviv: Gay Pride" I saw "LGT" instead of "LGBT". I see that you write about same sex couples and their right to marriage, adoption and surrogacy but what about transgender folks. I think it would be helpful to highlight the medical rights they have in Israel to fully transition, and whether or not they are allowed to legally change their documents to display the gender they identify with. What procedures are necessary for them to do so? For example some countries require bottom surgery while others do not.

A few other grammar/wording fixes I would make in the section Jerusalem: Religion and LGBT: - I might suggest changing the title to Religion and LGBT issues in Jerusalem. I think it sounds better and is more clear. - You describe that being homosexual is "okay" in Judaism. You might consider changing "okay" to another word such as acceptable or common, or even just going into more detail about what you mean by this. - In one of the opening lines, "depending on the orthodoxy of each religion..." I think for some readers, this statement might be confusing. You might want to make it clearer by explaining that each religion has different sects which observe rules differently, etc. - Just a last friendly note: Islamic and Muslim do not mean the exact same thing, so I would encourage you double check your writing and make sure you mean what you say.

In the opening paragraph and introduction, you describe that Israel is relatively tolerant compared to other conservative countries in the Middle East. I think it would be helpful for your readers if you provided some references, facts and background here. So mention Israel is more tolerant socially and legally, but what does that exactly mean? What are tolerant laws? What does tolerance look like socially? And how does one measure tolerance or conservatism? I think it might be too strong a statement to say Israel is more tolerant/less conservative in ALL ways compared to other countries in the Middle East (either way, such statements need some backing).