Talk:GRSJ224/Immigrant and refugee mental health in Canada

Hi there!

I enjoyed reading your wikipedia page - I think you did a really good job of explaining the discrepancies between mental health trends of migrants and Canadian-born people. In terms of improvement, some of your sections can get a little overly academic. As a wikipedia page is more of a general resource that's supposed to be accessible to all, you might want to consider simplifying the language or making it a little bit less dense, particularly in the social connectedness section. I'd also double check some of the citations - the last sentences of most of your paragraphs aren't cited, and I'm not sure if that's because the info comes from you or if you accidentally left out a source.

Overall, I thought you did a great job and reading your page gave me more insight into immigrant and refugee mental health.

Hi there,

Well done on your wiki page! You provided a cohesive and concise overview of immigrant and refugee mental health that was highly interesting to read. I particularly enjoyed the section on social determinants of mental health and could relate to many of the factors highlighted as a member of an immigrant and refugee community myself. I still remember that when my family moved to Canada, my dad was so stressed about getting re-certified by Canadian professional bodies while earning enough on the side to run the family that he relapsed with his chain smoking habit (in secret).

My first suggestion is to be more specific with certain ideas by citing statistics or examples from quantitative or qualitative studies or reports. For example, in the utilization of health care resources section, you can provide some rates of usage of different kinds of mental health services or prioritize which variables seem to be the most important (if this data is available). You’ve done this well in the mental illnesses section Ex. “Immigrant women are at two to three times the risk of their Canadian-born counterparts for postpartum depression” and “10 times the rate of post-traumatic stress disorder as well as elevated rates of depression, chronic pain and other somatic complaints.” More of this type of concrete detail in other sections would really round out the reader’s understanding of the topic.

My second suggestion is to make sure to reference all the ideas mentioned. For example, in the migration-associated risk factors section, the pre-migration and post-migration paragraphs are not cited.

All in all, great job! Well-researched and presented.

Hello!

Great job on your wiki post, you were well researched and made compelling points that helped the reader understand mental health in the contexts of immigrants and refugees. One suggestion that I have is to be a bit more detailed on some of your points. For example, you state that immigrants arrive healthier compared to Canadian citizens. When you say healthier, is it in terms of mental health, physical health or both? Another area where you could expand more would be in the depression section of mental health. In the end, you inform the reader that immigrant women are at a 2-3x higher risk for post-partum depression compared to Canadian women. Being able to explain why this might be the case could strengthen your article even more. One last thing, at the time that I am writing this there are currently no pictures on your article. Pictures may keep the readers more engaged in your article and they provide some aesthetic. Thanks for your great contribution to the wiki!

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