User talk:YounJooLee

Overall a very nice, informative entry. You give a good description of the instrument and how it works. I think it might be interesting to touch on traditional uses of the Janggu (dance, ceremony, concert?)

There are some grammatical issues with the use of commas and run on sentences. For example: First paragraph, second sentence - It is also called the seyogo for its shape, the word seyogo translating directly to 'slim waist drum'. A semi-colon might be a better choice, or simply breaking up the sentence into two different sentences. Dr. Waltham also suggested not starting off sentences with the word "it". You've done that a few times throughout your article.

The use of "filler" words are also quite prevalent - (Likewise, Like other membranophones, Out of these three categories, However... etc.) It should be fairly easy to rewrite those sentences to exclude them and have it as more "persuasive writing." (As based on the Wikipedia:Writing better articles)

An example of saying the same thing twice in one sentence: "As a membrane larger than the soundbox is attached to the head of janggu, its head is much larger than its soundbox." - The second halve of this sentence is redundant. Perhaps, "The membrane head is much larger than the soundbox of the janggu and therefore protrudes off the sides. This phenomena results in the division..."

Overall your formatting and paragraphs are well laid out. I would consider subheadings for your first sections "Structure of a Janggu". You could break it up into Assembly, Heads, Methods of Striking, Pitch/Tension.

Nicely done! I think you're somewhere between 800-900 words already so just a couple more sentences and you'll be good to go. :)