Structure and simplicity

Well performed investigation, the sources seem reliable and the research looks very well intentioned to expose ideas and remain in a diplomatic writing style. I see that one of the main areas to work could be the synthesis of your paragraphs, the density makes them hard to read when too long. Perhaps once you use the feature of references that someone else already recommended there might be significant change. In the meantime I would just edit a little bit the paragraphs to make them simple and legible.