Flow of writing

Flow of writing

Hi, I'm really glad you chose this topic as it is an important part of our political dynamics in Canada but many do not talk about it. I think that you could definelty improve upon the piece by looking at flow of the paragraphs. Many of the sentences could be combined to improve the way the paragraphs flow. Overall its good but could definelty use some polishing.

EmilyPaterson (talk)00:39, 3 December 2018