Suggestion

Hello there, I think you have chosen a very interesting topic and it is good that you gave some background information on some of the first openly gay professional male athletes although more details on their specific experiences in keeping positions on their teams or finding other teams and how the media reacted to their coming out. I think it could also be helpful to provide some context on the topic on some of the key terms used, to make it more clear and flow. Maybe explain the concept of masculinity and media portrayal of men and pro athletes in general.