Feedback

Hello,

I really liked this topic and found it interesting. I think you are off to a good start and I really would want to read it again once you finish. My suggestion to you is to add more sections, preferably sub sections to the collectivist ideal part, because I think that is a large section and you can find more about it. Also, I know this is a draft, but I saw some grammer mistakes that you might have missed, so make sure you proofread.

Good luck!