Great Topic

You have a great topic and intersectional approach. I thought that your introduction was very well written but in the sections after that I found some sentences to be a bit confusing. I would recommend reading these sections over again or maybe getting a friend to give you a second opinion. For example, I am not sure what you mean in this sentence: "Negative outcomes for HIV positive African American gay men include a higher mortality rate, an increase in proportion of aids cases from 19% to 34%, and the lowest decline in death rates across all groups".

There is also an inconsistency in your information since you say at one point that the “history of HIV screening are similar across groups” but then you later go on to say that “Black men who have sex with other men have a lower rate of HIV screening than their white counterparts”. Maybe I'm misunderstanding but these two statements seem to directly contradict each other.