Peer Review

Hi there! This is a very interesting topic that you chose to write about. I think pornography is a topic that people refuse to openly discuss due to embarrassment, awkwardness, discomfort, and self-consciousness. Moreover, it is also quite a sensitive topic, so I appreciate that you wrote about it so objectively!

You provided great statistics about how pornography ranks highly as one of the most-searched topics on the internet. You initially introduced three effects of pornography (objectification of women’s bodies, aggression towards women, and sexual aggression) and created separate sections for the former two effects, but left out the latter effect (sexual aggression). I think it would be great if you could create a section titled “Effects of Pornography” and provide three bolded lists, with an overview or description for each of these three topics. This could perhaps organize your writing better and create a better structure for your page!

In your section “What can be done in the future,” you did not exactly provide any solutions or approaches to alleviate the negative effects of pornography that you discussed in your page. By doing so, it could conclude your writing well and allow readers to learn about the problems that arise with pornography, and potential ways to resolve these problems (So your writing comes full circle).

Also, I noticed that your references were not in APA format, so in-text citations such as (Relationship between online), (Spanking) and (Sex in bits and bytes) might be easily confused as text instead of citations. It would be great if you could utilize the citation tools on wiki, so that each in-text citation will direct us to the appropriate references. I hope this helps. Thank you for your work!