Peer Feedback - Too much content!

Hi,

Great topic. I see that most of your work is in its preliminary stages, so there’s not too much to look into, however, I noticed you’ve made a lot of bullet points for things to include. This is great, but I don’t think you’ll have room to fit in everything within the specific 700 – 1000 word count in this project’s criteria. Instead, I think you should focus on the main elements of the topic and their details. As a reader, I would be much more interested in reading the details of one topic rather than surface-level sentences of multiple topics.

Although History is important, I don’t think it’s that interesting for this topic. Lookism in Asia is a hot topic today, and it’d be much more fascinating to read about its present state. I would merge your History and Origin headings together and exclude the point “Animals during mating season” as this point is already a very well-known phenomenon in the animal kingdom.

The other headings you have are awesome, and I’m looking forward to your completed page!