Music Concrete (Tomorrow Never Knows)
Hi I'm enjoying reading your article. I didn't know that this was such a milestone recording and I love to hear about those early tape experiments. I'm just going to make some notes as I go.
1. I would change the first paragraph to something like the following:
"Tomorrow Never Knows" is a song by the English rock band the Beatles that was released on their seventh album Revolver. It is a noted departure from their earlier more conventional sound, resulting from extensive experiments with the recording and editing process. "Tomorrow Never Knows" was the culmination of these experiments,[1] and led to techniques that would become ubiquitous in pop music.
2. The Beatles was a rock band from Liverpool, UK that was active from 1960 to 1970. The band comprised of George Harrison (guitar), John Lennon (guitar and vocals), Paul McCartney (bass guitar and vocals) and Ringo Starr (drums).
3. Sounds like 'a' seagull's call.
4. Comparing it 'to' figure 3.
5. the engineers at Abbey Road Studios 'had'.
6. suspended upside-'down' by rope.
7. The first breakthrough 'was' the
8. Double tracking is the act of layering
9. If you wanted to double track vocals, you had 'to'
10. A Leslie speaker was a special amplifier invented for a Hammond Organ
Overall, I like the way the article flows. I don't think I would re-order the sections. Most of what I found was spelling/grammatical/wording errors. I noted some of them above but there are still more. Watch for commas. In general, commas are only used when strictly necessary in scholarly writing, as opposed to in prose or poetic writing when commas signify a pause in speaking. Notice how I was able to get rid of a lot of commas in the first paragraph that bogged down the writing and aren't appropriate for scholarly writing style. As for the other grammatical stuff, I'd recommend you to put it into Word or Libre Office and see what red lines you get. The other thing is that I was hoping to get a bit of background on music concrète and Pierre Schaefer which I think could add another dimension to the article. At the same time I think you're at the required word count and I would respect if you want to focus on the song and not risk making the article too broad. One more thing is I think you could stand to make your diagrams of the waveforms a little bigger because we can't really see what's going on as is.