Course talk:Phys341 2020/Dizi

Hi thanks for the article. I enjoyed reading it and as a player of the Boehm transverse flute it's very interesting to read of another transverse flute instrument, especially one with a membrane, which I want to learn more about. Here are a few comments.

1. This may just be my taste but I think you could put your introductory paragraph above the contents section and put a nice photo of the dizi (perhaps someone playing it), up at the top.

2. 'this transverse, bamboo flute' (this comma is unnecessary and inappropriate in scholarly writing style).

3. 'It’s small' (should be its)

4. 'oldest and 'most' well-known instruments'

5. I would use some hyperlinks for things like circular breathing and maybe membrane.

Overall a good read. Another thing is that if you want the article to look more like a wikipedia page you could unbold the headings. I also noticed that you're a bit under the word count. I believe it's supposed to be between 1000 to 1500 words and you're standing around 800. One idea to expand the article could be a section called 'Modern Usage' or '20th Century-Today' that outlines how the dizi has evolved with modern culture and globalization and how that differs from its traditional role. Also this is just venturing a guess, but knowing that Chinese culture is rich with symbolism, I would imagine that the dizi has some cultural associations in this respect. You could create a section called 'Poetic Significance' or something like that and explain what the instrument has meant to various people. For instance, do any poets or authors relate it to any animals or gods or natural phenomena? Is it spoken of as entrancing, frightening, powerful? Is it related to dreams or spiritual experiences? Another idea is to speak of some important dizi players. Is there a person or some school of dizi playing that was very influential, either in ancient times or present, or both? Again thanks for the read and take care!