Course talk:PHYS341/Archive/2016wTerm2/AcousticsoftheGuitar

Hi,

There have been things done right here, but also a few things that I have caught. Firstly, I think that the level of description is at about where it should be, It was detailed enough for me to understand, but not too dense, which I think is good. You have a table of contents, an introduction paragraph, and a title, and everything seems to be structured as it should be.

That being said, it looks like you have a few grammar and spelling mistakes scattered throughout. Some that I can point out for you are: "The mass of the string effects the pitch" -> it should be "affects," not effects. "The strings provide the initial energy to vibrating top plate." -> Is missing a "the" in between "to" and "vibrating" "therefore the sounds wave is thin and insignificant." -> there is an extra "s" at the end of "sound" (Also the word insignificant could be seen as too strong of an adjective, it maybe makes the writing feel more persuasive than objective, so be careful in your use of adjectives!)

Also, be careful about being too colloquial, for example "plays less of a role" could perhaps be worded differently.

One part of the prose I felt was worded a little awkwardly is: "While the mode of vibration of the string is plucked as to produce sound, the musician must pluck them." I think "while" can just be omitted here.

I think for some concepts, torque for example, could benefit from being hyperlinked, so that if the reader doesn't understand a concept they can read about it on another wiki.

It's good that you've made mental notes to add diagrams and pictures to the article, those are important! Also, make sure you add to the "see also" section at the bottom of the page, otherwise it would look rather awkward to leave it empty!

Overall, I think that this is a good draft, the references are consistent, and the word count has been met. Your style is for the most part consistent and digestible for the reader, except in a few places that I pointed out, but make sure to scan through your draft thoroughly to tighten things up. Good work.