Course talk:PHYS341/2018/project/banhu

The Banhu: The project seems like it could be very strong, and we liked your instrument. However, we have listed some bullet points for improvement below.

• The project is very original, which is important.

• The last sentence of the Origin paragraph is a little bit wordy, making that sentence flow better

• paragraphs seem disjointed, find a way to relate the paragraphs/subjects to each other better. For example, you could put an introduction where the origin paragraph is now, and put the origin paragraph under the table of contents

• Construction paragraph might be stronger is labeled as "Structure" instead of "Construction"

• Construction paragraph and Strings paragraph could be merged into one.

• Sound is an important part of this project, the sound paragraph should be larger and more detailed.

• In general, paragraphs could use more detail, or be larger. You have not hit the criteria's minimum for words. Write more.

• There is no real citation/references. This is a very important feature!

• You need to add links within your paragraphs. (refer to example project)

• If you are going to speak of other instruments (the erhu) describe to us the instrument or link us to a page about the instrument so the reader knows what comparison you are trying to make.

• You need to speak more about physics. Perhaps tell us about some theory of string sound. Or explain to us how this instrument radiates its sound. The Sound paragraph right now just discusses what the instrument actually sounds like in basic detail.

• The writing itself is well-written and easily understandable, we appreciated this.

• I enjoyed your figures. They did a good job of illustrating the Banhu.

• I also enjoyed having the Chinese translation. We thought that was a cool feature.

– Maddy Bazzoni & Dayton Thodos