User talk:JulianaWinter

Hi Juliana. I really like your ideas here though I have a few suggestions to make your wikipage even better. May I suggest that you revise some of the sentences mostly in the first and second paragraphs? There are sentences that can benefit by placing commas or semicolons. In addition, try not to start sentences with "this" if you can avoid it! Perhaps re-wording your sentences and adding something like "which" + (insert your explanation here), may be better. I also noticed that you wrote in the section about the studies, "for the most part". Perhaps you can do without the words as the rest of the sentence itself suggests this idea already. I found the image you inserted to be helpful, however some other images/diagrams about brass instruments or woodwinds might make your page even more informative. You may also want to consider selecting a few instruments and examine their sound in respect to different materials in more depth (maybe one woodwind, brass instrument and stringed instrument for example). If possible, maybe you can insert some diagrams of sound spectrums to illustrate the differences. It may help us as readers understand your wiki entry better too.

Let me know if there's anything you don't quite understand about my suggestions. I'd be glad to reiterate them!