Talk:GRSJ224/Lookism in Asia

Hi,

Great topic. I see that most of your work is in its preliminary stages, so there’s not too much to look into, however, I noticed you’ve made a lot of bullet points for things to include. This is great, but I don’t think you’ll have room to fit in everything within the specific 700 – 1000 word count in this project’s criteria. Instead, I think you should focus on the main elements of the topic and their details. As a reader, I would be much more interested in reading the details of one topic rather than surface-level sentences of multiple topics.

Although History is important, I don’t think it’s that interesting for this topic. Lookism in Asia is a hot topic today, and it’d be much more fascinating to read about its present state. I would merge your History and Origin headings together and exclude the point “Animals during mating season” as this point is already a very well-known phenomenon in the animal kingdom.

The other headings you have are awesome, and I’m looking forward to your completed page!

Hello! I see that you have many points you want to go through for your topic. Because we are constrained by the maximum word count; I think it might be more beneficial to reduce the number of points and instead elaborate more on a few points to be able to give more information. Other than that the flow of your page works well as you start with a definition and finish with consequences of lookism.

I enjoyed reading your Wiki page. It looks like it’s definitely off to a good start! I have a few suggestions. Will you be making references and drawing connections from all Asia countries? Asia includes many countries and if you will be discussing a few Asian countries for your page, my suggestion is to change your title to reflect that you will focus only a few Asian countries. This way, the readers will know what to expect on your page and you can offer more depth in your topic. Cheers!