Talk:GRSJ224/Intersectionalfeminism

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I thoroughly enjoyed reading your wiki page on intersectional feminism vs. white feminism and found your page to be quite informational and insightful. One thing that I do believe will make your page a little better and more presentable is if you add headers to each paragraph or mini titles. I feel that this not only will let readers know what each paragraph is about and are able to sort out the information while reading but it also gives your wiki pages more of a finished and professional look to it. There are many great website sources that show you how to use wiki and what design features they contain which helps out a lot!

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I thoroughly enjoyed reading your post, and believe you have a good base to build on! One positive thing I believe you did was provide relevant examples with concise analysis. Two things I believe you could improve on were first as mentioned beforehand providing headers with clear topics to ease the reading experience, and second possibly combining the first two paragraphs as it is slightly redundant to define the topic twice.

Good start!

Hello, I enjoyed reading your post. This topic is very interesting and closely connected to our GRSJ 224A course about intersectionality. There is definitely many evident examples of intersectionality upon women in society today. Moreover, intersectionality on race is very evident as well. Not only are females perceived and stigmatized as the more vulnerable, submissive, and inferior gender, race can also negatively affect an individual even more. It is great that there is a movement that aims to publically exploit the discriminations that are placed upon individuals, based on their gender and race.

I would definitely recommend you to create an introduction summary of intersectionality feminism and to further separate your writing into subcategories or sections. That way, it will make the page easier to read and follow along. It would also allow readers to know what the subsection topics are for this wiki page, prior to reading the entire wiki page. From what you have written so far, I would suggest creating subcategories for Double-Standard (include the wage gap and how that ties into not only gender but race), Intersectionality Feminism vs. White Feminism, Criteria to become an Intersectional Feminism, The Effects of the Movement. Nonetheless, great start!

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I think overall the topic and information looks good. I think however, you can provide a short biography of the people you mention in the article. For example, who is Kimberle Crenshaw? For people who don't know anything about intersectional feminism, it is hard to understand the significance of her. So maybe add something about how she's a lawyer/ professor, so we can understand why she has so much pull in this area and how she was able to start a movement. As well, a small background of Laci Green and Franchesca Ramsey would be helpful too. Were they put into any situations where intersectional feminism was needed? I think this would really help as it can help us understand why these girls' advice are trustworthy.

And Isabelle noted below, it would really help to organize the topic under different headings!

Tavy Wu

Hey! This is a very interesting Wiki page extremely connected to our GRSJ course, which is great. I like how you used names and examples of feminists and the wage gap, this makes it easy to relate the page to real life struggles. A few formatting suggestions I have for you might make your Page more organized. Make sure to use headings, such as Introduction or Summary, Background, Examples, Conclusion etc. I had a tricky time trying to format my page, but once you are on your Wiki page, click “Edit” in the top right corner. Then you will find a tool bar in the Middle Top area of the page and there will be a ‘Help’ tab you can click on. Although it’s tedious it’s helpful. -Isabelle Durrans - 70727284